1.en.33 peer teaching: edit your classmates’ writings

Well, if you are going to be role models for first year ESO students, you must improve your writing. Here follows a contribution of a student from our group that certainly needs some polishing. Check the list of things to improve and do it.

  • Spelling mistakes
  • Adjectives with “s”
  • Subjects missing
  • Punctuation marks that should not be there
  • Unconnected ideas within the same paragaph
  • Wrong tenses
  • No space after punctuation marks
  • Word order
  • Agreement subject verb

I am not going to say the name of the person who wrote this, I’m sure he/she can do it better. Let’s see if you can correct it. First year students will certainly appreciate it. They have to copy in their notebooks your compositions, so don’t let them copy so many mistakes.

The errors that appear in red in this composition are also present in many others. The underlined sections show that different ideas are mixed within a paragraph and that coherence and internal cohesion are missing.  Check them !

Chenoa was a student of Ramon Llull.She said that this school is not very different now.The part of the school that she liked very much is the “sala magna”.

She is a very feamus singer.She want to “Operacion triunfo”.She talked abaut her problems and her experius of her live and also said to be feamous is very difficult.Because all the people talk abaut you.She loves this school.

She loves her fans and for her they are very importants.When Chanoa went to this school she was a rebel person.She liked very much the music.In the end we asked questions and Chenoa anserwed.

My opinion:
Chenoa is a very good person and funny.Her talk was very interesting.She is feamus but she is a very normal person.

Another example that needs editing, this time it is the comparison of your former school and Anselm Turmeda primary school.

My former primary school was CP Eugenio López y López.
My school is more happies and luminous than Anselm Turmeda.
In Eugenio López y López are four story building and Anselm Turmeda is two story building.
My school haven’t got an orchard but there are tree and four big playground than Anselm Turmeda.
In Eugenio López y López has dining service and approximately
there are 564 and in Anselm Turmeda are 180.
My school are three class for group and in Alsem Turmeda are one class for group.

Do you know what peer teaching is?  First, look it up in the dictionary.  Then, put peer teaching into practice by posting your corrections to the blog.


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20 Respostes to “1.en.33 peer teaching: edit your classmates’ writings”

  1. india16 Says:

    I like this idea , of the peer teaching.

  2. tatidt Says:

    Chenoa was a student from Ramon Llull.She said that this school is not very different now.The part of the school that she liked very much is the “sala magna”.

    She is a very famous singer. She went to “Operacion triunfo”. She talked about her problems and her experience of her life and also said to be famous is very difficult. Because all the people talk about you. She loves this school.

    She loves her fans and for her they are very importants. When Chenoa went to this school she was a rebel person. She liked very much the music.In the end we asked questions and Chenoa anwsered.

    My opinion:
    Chenoa is a very good person and funny. Her talk was very interesting. She is famous but she is a very normal person.

  3. tatidt Says:

    My former primary school was CP Eugenio López y López.
    My school is happier and luminous than Anselm Turmeda.
    In Eugenio López y López it’s a four storey building and Anselm Turmeda is a two storey building.
    My school hasn’t got an orchard but there are three playgrounds bigger than Anselm Turmeda’s playground.
    In Eugenio López y López has dining service and there are, approximately, 564 and in Anselm Turmeda are 180.
    My school has got three classes for group and in Alsem Turmeda are one class for group.

  4. idaira santana Says:

    My former primary school was CP Eugenio López y López.
    My school is happier and luminous than Anselm Turmeda.
    In Eugenio López y López there are four-storey building and Anselm Turmeda is two-storey building.
    My school don’t have orchard but there are trees and four playgrounds bigger than Anselm Turmeda.
    In Eugenio López y López there are around 564 pupils and in Anselm Turmeda are 180 pupils.
    My school has got three classes four group and in Anselm Turmeda are one class for group.

  5. idaira santana Says:

    Chenoa was student from Ramon Llull. She said that this school is not very different now.The part of the school that she liked very much is the “sala magna”.
    She is a very famous singer.She went to “Operacion triunfo”.She talked about her problems and her experience of her life and also said to be famous is very difficult.Because all the people talk about you.
    She loves this school.
    She loves her fans and for her they are very important.
    When Chenoa went to this school she was a rebel person. She liked very much the music.In the end we asked questions and Chenoa answer.
    My opinion:
    Chenoa is a very good person and funny. Her talk was very interesting. She is famous but she is a very normal person.

  6. pepe1997 Says:

    Chenoa was a student Ramon Llull.She said that this school is not very different now.The part of the school that she liked very much is the “sala magna”.

    She is a very faumus singer.She went to “Operacion triunfo”. She talked about her problems and her experius of her life and also said to be faumous is very difficult.Because all the people talk about you. She loves this school.

    She loves her fans and for her they are very important.When Chenoa went to this school she was a rebel person.She liked very much the music.In the end we asked questions and Chenoa ansewed.

    My opinion:
    Chenoa is a very good person and funny. Her talk was very interesting. She is faumous but she is a very normal person.

  7. india16 Says:

    Chenoa was a student from Ramon Llull.She said that this school is not very different now.The part of the school that she liked very much is the “sala magna”.

    She is a very famous singer. She went to “Operacion triunfo”. She talked about her problems and her experience of her life and also said to be famous is very difficult. Because all the people talk about you. She loves this school.

    She loves her fans and for her they are very importants. When Chenoa went to this school she was a rebel person. She liked very much the music.In the end we asked questions and Chenoa anwsered.

    My opinion:
    Chenoa is a very good person and funny. Her talk was very interesting. She is famous but she is a very normal person.

    • india16 Says:

      Chenoa was a student from Ramon Llull.She said that this school is not very different now. The part of the school that she liked very much is the “sala magna”.

      She is a very famous singer. She went to “Operación triunfo”. She talked about her problems and her experience of her life and also said to be famous is very difficult. Because all the people talk about you. She loves this school.

      She loves her fans and for her they are very importants. When Chenoa went to this school she was a rebel person. She liked very much the music. In the end we asked questions and Chenoa anwsered.

      My opinion:
      Chenoa is a very good person and funny. Her talk was very interesting. She is famous but she is a very normal person.

  8. india16 Says:

    My former primary school was CP Eugenio López y López.
    My school is happier and luminous than Anselm Turmeda.
    In Eugenio López y López it’s a four storey building and Anselm Turmeda is a two storey building.
    My school hasn’t got an orchard but there are three playgrounds bigger than Anselm Turmeda’s playground.
    In Eugenio López y López has dining service and there are, approximately, 564 and in Anselm Turmeda are 180.
    My school has got three classes for group and in Alsem Turmeda are one class for group.

  9. emil7234 Says:

    Correction of Chenoa ‘s talk.

    Chenoa was a Ramon Llull ‘s student. She said that this school is not very different now . When she went in this school she was rebel. She loves very much the music , for that her favorite part of the school was the ” sala magna “. Chenoa loves our school.

    She is very famous singer , because she participated in ”Operacion triumfo”. She talked her problems and her experience of the life. Also said to be famous is very difficult , because all person talk her life.

    In the end we asked her every tip of questions.

    My opinion
    Chenoa is a very good person and funny. Her talk was very interesting. She is famous but is a normal person.

    Correction the comparasion

    My former primary school was “CP Eugenio Lopez y Lopez” .
    My school is more luminous than Anselm Turmeda.
    In Eugenio Lopez y Lopez is four storey building and Anselm Turmeda is two storey building.
    My school hasn ’t gotan orchard , but there are trees and four playgrounds bigger than Anselm Turmeda.
    In Eugenio Lopez and Lopez has dining service and average there are 564 pupils and in Anselm Turmeda , there are 180.
    In my school there are three classes for group and in Anselm Tormeda , one for group.

  10. andrea199762 Says:

    My former primary school was CP Eugenio López y López.
    My school is happier and luminous than Anselm Turmeda.
    In Eugenio López y López it’s a four storey building and Anselm Turmeda is a two storey building.
    My school hasn’t got an orchard but there are three playgrounds bigger than Anselm Turmeda’s playground.
    In Eugenio López y López has dining service and there are, approximately, 564 and in Anselm Turmeda are 180.
    My school has got three classes for group and in Alsem Turmeda are one class for group.

    Chenoa was a student from Ramon Llull.She said that this school is not very different now. The part of the school that she liked very much is the “sala magna”.
    She is a very famous singer. She went to “Operación triunfo”. She talked about her problems and her experience of her life and also said to be famous is very difficult. Because all the people talk about you. She loves this school.
    She loves her fans and for her they are very importants. When Chenoa went to this school she was a rebel person. She liked very much the music. In the end we asked questions and Chenoa anwsered.
    My opinion:
    Chenoa is a very good person and funny. Her talk was very interesting. She is famous but she is a very normal person.

  11. sarah789 Says:

    Chenoa was a student from Ramon Llull. She said that this school is not very different now. The part of the school that she liked very much is the “sala magna”.
    She is a very famous singer. She went to “Operación triunfo”. She talked about her problems and her experiences of her life and also said to be famous is very difficult. Because all the people talk about you. She loves this school.
    She loves her fans and for her they are very importants. When Chenoa went to this school she was a rebel person. She liked very much the music. In the end we asked questions and Chenoa anwsered.
    My opinion:
    Chenoa is a very good person and funny. Her talk was very interesting. She is famous but she is a very normal person.
    _______________________________________________
    My former primary school was CP Eugenio López y López.
    My school is happier and luminous than Anselm Turmeda.
    In Eugenio López y López it’s a four storey building and Anselm Turmeda is a two storey building.
    My school hasn’t got an orchard but there are three playgrounds bigger than Anselm Turmeda’s playground.
    In Eugenio López y López has dining service and there are, approximately, 564 and in Anselm Turmeda are 180.
    My school has got three classes for group and in Alsem Turmeda are one class for group.

  12. miguelinramonllull Says:

    1st correction (Chenoa’s talk):

    Chenoa was a student here, in the Ramon Llull . She said that this school is not very different now . When she went in this school she was rebel. She loves very much the music, and her favourite room (or class) of the high school was the “sala magna”. Chenoa loves our school.

    She is very famous singer , because she won “Operacion triunfo”. She talked her problems and her experience of the life. Also said to be famous is very difficult , because all person talk her life.

    In the end we asked Chenoa a lot type of questions.

    My opinion
    Chenoa is a very good person and funny. Her talk was very interesting. She is famous but is a normal person.

    2nd correction (Comparison of the Anselm Turmeda).

    My former primary school was “CP Eugenio López y López” .
    My school is more luminous than Anselm Turmeda.
    In Eugenio López y López is four storey building and Anselm Turmeda is only two storey building.
    My school, Eugenio López y López, hasn’t got an orchard , but there are trees and four playgrounds bigger than Anselm Turmeda.
    In Eugenio López and López has dining service and average there are 564 pupils and in Anselm Turmeda , there are average 180 pupils.
    In my school there are three classes for group and in Anselm Turmeda, one for each group.

    These are my corrections.

  13. Peptoni Font Says:

    My corrections:
    Chenoa’s composition:
    Chenoa is the artistic name and her name is Laura Corradini Falomir.
    She is a singer. She studied in the Ramon Llull. Her favourite classes were music and geography. She talked with the students today ans she explained that she smoked and skipped classes.
    She lives in Madrid, next to “Atorcha” (is a train station). The street is her favourite site.
    She participated in different castings and programs. In “Operación Triunfo” she won a prime.
    Your favourite football player is Messi.
    She worked in a school as children education and in the “Casino Mallorca”.
    She plays the guitar and a little the piano. Her mother and grand-mother are singers too.
    Everyday she practice sport.

    My former primary school:
    My former primary school was CP Son Pisà, is has bigger than Anselm Turmeda. Son Pisà has got white facade and Anselm Turmeda has got brown facade. The classes in Anselm Turmeda were decorated with children’s work, in my school too. Also there are more windows in Son Pisà that Anselm Turmeda and has one entrance, but my primary school has 3 entrances. Son Pisà is a 3 storey building.
    My school has 9 courses of childhood education and 18 of primary. There are more students (650) than Anselm Turmeda (180).
    The courtyards has the same things that Anselm Turmeda (basketball, football and voleyball courts).
    In my School we don’t have any orchards. Only a small garden.

    • Peptoni Font Says:

      Sorry, I don’t understand the post. Now if.

      My corrections:
      Chenoa’s composition:
      Chenoa was a student from Ramon Llull. She said that this school is not very different now. The part of the school that she liked very much is the “sala magna”.
      She is a very famous singer. She won “Operacion triunfo”. She talked about her problems and her experiences of her life and also said to be famous is very difficult. Because all the people talk about you. Chenoa loves our school.
      She loves her fans and for her they are very importants. When Chanoa went to this school she was a rebel person. She liked very much the music. In the end we asked questions and Chenoa anserwed.
      My opinion:
      Chenoa is a very good person and funny. Her talk was very interesting. She is famous but she is a very normal person.

      My former primary school:
      My former primary school was CP Eugenio Lopez.
      My school is happier and luminous than Anselm Turmeda.
      In Eugenio Lopez it’s a four storey building and Anselm Turmeda is a two storey building.
      My school hasn’t got an orchard but there are three playgrounds bigger than Anselm Turmeda playground.
      In Eugenio Lopez has dining service and there are, aproximated 564 pupils and in Anselm Turmeda are 180.
      My school has got three classes for group and in Alsem Turmeda are one class for group.

  14. xiskete Says:

    TALK OF CHENOA.
    Chenoa was in the highschool, in the morning in the music room.
    Her true name is Laura Corradini and she is from Argentina. She was student at the Ramon Llull. She was a rebel student because she skipped classes but when Chenoa had to repeat shje started to study because she lost her friends.
    At 15 she made a music band and she had to pass all the subjects to be allowed to play in the band. While worked teaching littles kids and in the casino she took part in “Operacion Triunfo” a contest of singer.
    Is the reason why she is famous now. But she didn’t like it because the people were more rude with the autographs. She loves her club of fans abd she sends photos to every flat. Because the fans send presents to her. She lives in a flat in Madrid.

    My former primary school:
    My school is happier and luminous than Anselm Turmeda.
    In Eugenio López y López it’s a four storey building and Anselm Turmeda is a two storey building.
    My school hasn’t got an orchard but there are three playgrounds bigger than Anselm Turmeda’s playground.
    In Eugenio López y López has dining service and there are, approximately, 564 and in Anselm Turmeda are 180.
    My school has got three classes for group and in Alsem Turmeda are one class for group.

  15. angelblanchvallespir Says:

    Chenoa’s correction:
    Chenoa was a student from Ramon Llull.She said that this school is not very different now.The part of the school that she liked very much is the “sala magna”.

    She is a very famous singer. She went to “Operacion triunfo”. She talked about her problems and her experience of her life and also said to be famous is very difficult. Because all the people talk about you. She loves this school.

    She loves her fans and for her they are very importants. When Chenoa went to this school she was a rebel person. She liked very much the music.In the end we asked questions and Chenoa anwsered.

    • angelblanchvallespir Says:

      My former primary school was Eugenio López y López.
      My school is happier and luminous than Anselm Turmeda.
      Eugenio López y López it’s a four storey building and Anselm Turmeda is a two one.
      My school hasn’t got an orchard but there are some threes, the playground is bigger than Anselm Turmeda’s playground.
      In Eugenio López y López has dining service and there are, approximatly, 564 and in Anselm Turmeda are 180.
      My school has got three classes for group and in Alsem Turmeda has only one class for group.

  16. aina tous Says:

    My former primary school is Son Piza. Anselm Turmeda is very different, because It is in the countryside and has a lot to do with nature and animals.
    Son Piza has a white walls, has three big playground, four stories and lot of windows.
    Anselm Turmeda It’s painted a salmon colour outside and has only one playground, but It has a small area for hens. It has only 180 pupils.
    Anselm Turmeda is older than Son Piza.
    Son Piza is bigger than Anselm Turmeda.
    The two schools are low and flat.

    • aina tous Says:

      Chenoa.
      This morning we went to the music room, because Chenoa came to Ramón Llull to give a talk about her life, and give us some advice on student life.

      Chenoa was a former student at this high school , she said that she was a rebel and she got bad marks, but after repeating, she changed, because, if she was a bad student, she wasn’t allowed to sing with her friends.

      When, she was older, she worked in a primary school, and at night, in the casino.

      One day, Chenoa saw a ad in the TV, about Operación Triunfo auditions, and she went to Valencia, to take the audition and then she was very happy because she was accepted to go to the programme.


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