Well, if you are going to be role models for first year ESO students, you must improve your writing. Here follows a contribution of a student from our group that certainly needs some polishing. Check the list of things to improve and do it.
- Spelling mistakes
- Adjectives with “s”
- Subjects missing
- Punctuation marks that should not be there
- Unconnected ideas within the same paragaph
- Wrong tenses
- No space after punctuation marks
- Word order
- Agreement subject verb
I am not going to say the name of the person who wrote this, I’m sure he/she can do it better. Let’s see if you can correct it. First year students will certainly appreciate it. They have to copy in their notebooks your compositions, so don’t let them copy so many mistakes.
The errors that appear in red in this composition are also present in many others. The underlined sections show that different ideas are mixed within a paragraph and that coherence and internal cohesion are missing. Check them !
Chenoa was a student of Ramon Llull.She said that this school is not very different now.The part of the school that she liked very much is the “sala magna”.
She is a very feamus singer.She want to “Operacion triunfo”.She talked abaut her problems and her experius of her live and also said to be feamous is very difficult.Because all the people talk abaut you.She loves this school.
She loves her fans and for her they are very importants.When Chanoa went to this school she was a rebel person.She liked very much the music.In the end we asked questions and Chenoa anserwed.
Chenoa is a very good person and funny.Her talk was very interesting.She is feamus but she is a very normal person.
Another example that needs editing, this time it is the comparison of your former school and Anselm Turmeda primary school.
My former primary school was CP Eugenio López y López.
My school is more happies and luminous than Anselm Turmeda.
In Eugenio López y López are four story building and Anselm Turmeda is two story building.
My school haven’t got an orchard but there are tree and four big playground than Anselm Turmeda.
In Eugenio López y López has dining service and approximately
there are 564 and in Anselm Turmeda are 180.
My school are three class for group and in Alsem Turmeda are one class for group.
Do you know what peer teaching is? First, look it up in the dictionary. Then, put peer teaching into practice by posting your corrections to the blog.